Was having a lot of thoughts and decided to try my hand at this. Was kind of proud of how the second one turned out.


They say love is blind

but before you I could not see.

Romantic movies and poetry

finally fill my heart with glee.

 

With sorrow and sadness as well,

for I’m alone in this race.

You didn’t follow when I fell,

but I try to rise with grace.

 

A friend is all you want for now,

so a friend I try to be;

but if you ever want everything,

look no further than me.

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    3 days ago

    i think you have a good start

    if you want some feedback

    try to be more abstract, i understand what you’re going through but it’s needs to be more something outside so only a repeat reading makes the story